1. The wind flowing, sun shinning and the tan sand relaxing. My brain was hot as a hot dog. When it was a sizzling day to go to the "BEACH" ! Beep, Beep as the horn of the car wheel button's alarm went on. As I plunged to the car, all I saw was my body ready to swim.
2. Waves pushing, seagulls flying in circles, as I pushed the handle back and ran as fast as I can to the sand. My mum came with two big buckets so we can start building a sand castle. Two rows on the floor and 3 on the top and the final one was the one like a cherry on top a " Flag". As I got my swimsuit on, mum called me out to come and had lunch together.
3.I munched,and munched, as fast as I could. Sandwiches and an ice cold drink. We had to pack up because it was almost night. As sunset came we drove back home. I sat on the sofa in our living room and felt sleep right there.
I had a really fun day.
By: Naomi Sepelini Poufa
26/08/13.
Sounds like a fun day. I have enjoyed reading your recount Naomi. The orientation is interesting. You have used some powerful words to make it more interesting and to hook the reader in. Use the space bar after each word.
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ReplyDeletei love how you use the word 'plunged' and how you described how you felt and your emotions.
ReplyDeletekeep it going naomi.
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